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10-26-2007, 10:05 AM
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Mirror, Mirror
(I think this may be abstract, not sure, I just went with my muse.)
Mirror, Mirror,
Staring through perpetuity
Fingers brushing replication
Self-symmetry, angles, curves
Metamorphosis in the eyes of a stranger.
On the wall…
silvered glass
Echoes truth,
Tainting the perfection
She hides behind.
Who is the fairest…
Light refracts a foreign face,
The synthetic touching reality,
An answer creating itself
Out of frozen time.
One of all?
static moments thaw,
Running into one another
Like a child‘s tears, crying out
“Not you.”
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Last edited by murdershewrote2005 : 10-26-2007 at 03:06 PM.
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10-26-2007, 10:47 AM
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Hi murdershewrote2005,
aside from the obvious, is there some link between
Snow White (Mirror, mirror ...)
and Alice (through the looking glass ...)?
black, blue, red, I think your muse led you astray here ...
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10-26-2007, 10:55 AM
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I dont know if there is a link. Fairy tales as escape maybe???
As for the blue, black, red, that is meant to be bruising. Sorry.
Thanks for reading though!!!
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10-26-2007, 03:06 PM
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Okay. I did a serious overhaul. Better or no?
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10-26-2007, 04:11 PM
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serious overhaul indeed ...
Better? ... yes ... much ...
but rethink perpetuity ...
eternal and unchanging is the illusion, not the reality ...
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Nature abhors perfection - cats abhor a vacuum!
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10-27-2007, 03:40 AM
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Thanks Cran. Will rethink perpetuity.
Jess
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