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Poetry Poems, Haiku & Tanka etc.

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Old 10-23-2007, 09:22 PM   #1
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fall

This isn't finished, not by a long shot. But I've been writing mostly just for myself. But I wanted to see what other people think of it. And no, I'm not a 14 year old depressed teenager. I just need a way to express my feelings and I'm not so good at directly talking to people. Writing helps, I guess. Anway. Enjoy

you've done it to me twice now
my god, i bet you're so proud
to take the person that loves you most
and rip their fucking heart out

the ones you've hurt, what a feat
mines just one you've bruised and beat
you say you care but what you really mean
is that i'm the one you sometimes need

i wish that i could just forget
because this time, i've lost two friends
a girl that i truly love
and a friend. at least i thought he was

maybe one day you'll see the light
and love me for the reasons that are right
but until then don't speak to me
admit your problem, i wish you'd see

every way for you i've bent
i'm not calling this the end
because you'll fall the same old way
in love with me, i hope and pray
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Old 10-23-2007, 09:39 PM   #2
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Most people would think you wanting someone back who had hurt you (ripped out your heart) would indicate you have some self loathing issues.
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Old 10-23-2007, 09:42 PM   #3
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I just noticed that I posted this in the wrong forum. My apologies.

Thanks for the comment, I think.
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