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Old 10-23-2007, 07:52 AM   #1
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Construction

There are quiet days when I sit
in a room's comforting corner,
study moving joints that permit
knee, ankle, thumb and finger.

The leap for a cell to acquire
complex structure is almost enough
to make me believe but desire
and truth are not the same language.
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Old 10-23-2007, 08:10 AM   #2
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This is a wonderful poem. Thumbs up.
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Old 10-23-2007, 08:14 AM   #3
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Can't fault this one dannyboy
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Like this. Maybe too many "the's" in last stanza?
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That Promethean stuff is a stanza, right?
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Old 10-23-2007, 08:42 AM   #6
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It's only two the's and they aren't close to each other. I think it's fine. I like this one.
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Old 10-23-2007, 07:13 PM   #7
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amadeus the promethean stuff is just my sig.
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Old 10-23-2007, 07:17 PM   #8
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Believe in what? God?
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Old 10-23-2007, 07:22 PM   #9
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intelligent design specifically.
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Old 10-23-2007, 07:26 PM   #10
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I was close. Good piece.
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Old 10-23-2007, 07:28 PM   #11
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Intelligent design requires an intelligent designer.
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very good. i have nothing to say.
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