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10-22-2007, 02:09 PM
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I'm Leaving The Country
It's been a long few years
and I've just decided.
I'm going to sail to France.
Tomorrow, I'll sail to France.
Hope there's something for sale,
In France.
I will take some photos
when I sail to France.
I would live on the streets
If I could sail to France.
If there's something I would do,
I'd sail to France.
I hope there's something for sale,
When I sail to France.
Best poem I've ever written, 'cos there ain't a line that ain't true.
No one'll read it though, 'cos I'm Pale Gallery.
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Last edited by Pale Gallery : 10-22-2007 at 02:53 PM.
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10-22-2007, 02:21 PM
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I absolutely love this one Pale. I've been wanting to write a poem particularly about my desire to vagabond in Europe too but I haven't got the balls to do it (or write it!). I like this one. I think it's probably your best (thought there was another one of yours I thought was your best too...) Oh well. People should read this one.
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10-22-2007, 02:36 PM
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Right, I'll meet you in Europe somewhere.
Look out for the guy writing poetry.
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10-22-2007, 02:41 PM
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I read it Pale. Hope you write some good poetry in France  |
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10-22-2007, 02:51 PM
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You spelled "tomorrow" wrong. Otherwise it's pretty good... I like it. It sounds like a fun trip, but I'm not a fan of French food. I used to take French language lessons though.
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10-22-2007, 02:53 PM
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Quote:
Originally Posted by Baron
I read it Pale. Hope you write some good poetry in France |
People don't write poetry in France...
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10-22-2007, 03:05 PM
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Last edited by Pale Gallery : 10-23-2007 at 04:54 PM.
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10-22-2007, 03:10 PM
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I hope there are things on sale in France too. Would be a boring trip without them.
Great poem. I laughed.
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10-22-2007, 03:13 PM
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"Why am I being held against my will?"
(Sorry, I had to put a caption.)
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10-22-2007, 03:17 PM
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Originally Posted by cinder and smoke
I hope there are things on sale in France too. Would be a boring trip without them.
Great poem. I laughed.
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Tut, tut. Why'd you laugh?
This was a very heartfelt poem miss.
I think people expect my poems to be humorous now.
It might of been a dream, but I seem to remember a stall selling monkey brains?
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10-22-2007, 03:20 PM
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I laughed because it was laugh-worthy. In the best way possible. I'm sailing to France too. Maybe I will see you there? I'll be the woman eating a baguette.
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10-22-2007, 03:29 PM
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Quote:
Originally Posted by Eiji Tunsinagi
People don't write poetry in France...
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10-22-2007, 03:30 PM
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Read Samuel Becket
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I know I know... I prefer Georges Perec though.
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10-22-2007, 03:50 PM
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I laughed because it was laugh-worthy. In the best way possible. I'm sailing to France too. Maybe I will see you there? I'll be the woman eating a baguette.
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Ohhhhh, but I'll never find you. 
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10-22-2007, 04:00 PM
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You'll have to look harder I guess. I'll give you another hint: I'll be the woman with a magical baguette. What magical is...I can't tell you. You gotta find that out for yourself 
Nap time. See ya.
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