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Poetry Poems, Haiku & Tanka etc.

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Old 10-21-2007, 12:03 PM   #1
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Me And Woman, Halloween

Dining with the witch, once again.
Nothing in her eyes tells me this time.
A disguise?

On her part.

I'm taking my time with this meal,
As it's already late.
Though, with my eyes on her chest
It's hard to concentrate.

A very pleasant halloween though, I must say.
She's starting to look tired, it's been a long day.

Should I ask her to kip, ask her to stay?
Just for one night, have her my way?

No, I must be quiet.
Long hard day, makes mind go funny.

The lady speaks...
"Am gettin' tired love, tayke me 'ome please now."
"But lady, we were bein' so friendley toogether?"
"Nay John, it's not ryte. Me bein' mutch older an all that."
"It's a bit questionable, I know... But please love?"
"No I will not, tayke me home!"
"I will tayke yu 'ome now, but I'll be seein' you again."
"How dare yu speke too me lyke I whore!
Yu bein' deemon two nyte John, not pleased, I'm not."
"Wel get the hell owt then witch! We'll never speak again."
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Old 10-21-2007, 03:50 PM   #2
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Though the end was a little of a let down, that conversation was the highlight of this piece. Good stuff man.
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Old 10-21-2007, 03:58 PM   #3
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As in, for an ending?
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Old 10-21-2007, 04:53 PM   #4
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Eh, not much of a climax here, even if the conversation was funny.
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