Firebird

Baron

The question in the title suggests that this has been posted before and editted. If that's the case it would be good to add a link to the original post so that people can answer your question. With so much work flowing through this forum people are not necessarily going to just remember the original unless it's a truly memorable poem.

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Eiji Tunsinagi

I like the final stanza, but the 2nd felt strangely unnatural - I am not sure why...I think it might be because of the last line of the stanza...I did like the first simple line though.

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Firebird

Firebird

Baron

I think that you need to look at line breaks.

This is just an idea.

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