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Poetry Poems, Haiku & Tanka etc.

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Old 09-30-2007, 09:46 PM   #1
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Framework

Patching frames of guesswork from ceiling to floor,
Only a matter of time before I barricade the door,
Dour sour patch element fuses with the tincture,
Giving birth to a scowl factor Hobbesian state of nature,
This is the equator of belt buckle bliss,
Taking pride in cackling about how something is amiss,
Murmured stories hold no glory but any for the teller,
Just hope that the tales you bear are worth the sale,
Roam the wild forests untainted by any hand,
Refraining from building frameworks based on popular demand.
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Old 09-30-2007, 10:02 PM   #2
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Been arguing with Hodge? The only criticism that I have of this is that the last line runs away a little.
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Been arguing with Hodge? The only criticism that I have of this is that the last line runs away a little.

Huh?

I will try to condense that last line. Thanks Baron.
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Huh?
Your reference to Hobbesian.
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Denser than a rock, I am I am. Heh.
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