Lady Fire

I knew you, you were within me,
you didn’t know me, I was within you,
always there, never wavering,
ever evolving but steadfast the same.

If you fear me how much greater is my fear of you?
I elude myself, you digress momentarily toward an
idea but mindfully hit refresh, offer an explanation instead.

You hunt me an effort to destroy
that which is not of my control
and in destruction end existence.
Self annihilation, do it!

Uncover me so I might have access to you,
kill me, lose your life.
Desperately seek sensation, ignore emotion
which you desire eradicated with
skeptical indifference.

Use your latest mind drug, that apathetic technological syntax.
Catch me if you can, I caught you every night,
here I am waiting for you! Ignore myself, bring annihilation,
seek myself, bring annihilation either way win/lose.

Enjoy your distraction until once again
we face each other. Call my name the one we share,
unaffected and ambivalent will I respond to your vibration.

Eiji Tunsinagi

This felt intense and in the moment. A little confusing - but only a little. I think it needs more imagery...this was a lot of emotion, though. Maybe that's not a bad thing.

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SteMcGrath

Is it some infatuation? Or openeing up to yourself? Or have I read it completely wrong? I liked alot of it but some of it didn't flow.

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Lady Fire

Eiji -thanks glad it was only a little confusing this time! I'll work on imagery it was a tough write.

SteMcGrath - Thanks will take a second look at flow, I've removed a few words I felt were redundant this morning. And you were right on both fronts in a sense. An infatuation with the psyche you might say.

g-paw

An interesting perspective of the self, viewed as a separate entity. It looks like something I might have tried. I didn't have a lot of trouble with the flow/meter until the 5th stanza.

In spite of the title, I had the impression that you were speaking to another person. That's good. Nicely done.

Baron

Good to see one of your posts on the forum again. I think that if you tidy up the last two stanzas this will be a strong piece.

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