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Old 08-15-2007, 01:23 PM   #1
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Me and Mitt Romney
got into a fist fight
on a rooftop bathed in sunlight
and naturally, he vaporized
I wasn't particularly surprised.
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Old 08-15-2007, 01:29 PM   #2
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I had to google him (english) but I get it now. That's cute.
I don't think 'particularly' fits the rythm. You need three syllables there, not five. Try 'terribly' or something like that.
Ditch the and, too.
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ah, satire
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Old 08-15-2007, 01:34 PM   #4
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I don't hate Mitt, I just hate his stupid first name. What is it short for? Mitty? I do think he is a vampire though.
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