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Old 08-15-2007, 10:56 AM   #1
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Old 08-15-2007, 12:15 PM   #2
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I think a better title would be something like... Chameleon. Since there seems to be a lot of duplicity. The speakers', the subjects', the crowds'.

Interesting, Pete.
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Old 08-15-2007, 12:27 PM   #3
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apart from some weird line breaks, this was a very nicely done piece.
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Old 08-15-2007, 07:50 PM   #4
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The first stanza, preamble that doesn't need to be there?
You could get away with more grit added I reckon.
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Inkwad is right regarding the grit.
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good strong writing...i like this poem alot...its rawness moved me
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