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Old 08-09-2007, 01:17 AM   #1
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Naive Complex

Spoken Word...

I fell asleep and woke up in a dreamscape fantasy,

Image plastered over image central,
To the submissive psyche centerfold compulsion,
Instead of revulsion, I was surprisingly numb,
I stubbed my tongue on a brick of canvas,
And wrung it through my hands in a gesture of contempt,
Where words can fail, ideas will grow,
Dripping from my tongue to the garden below,
A mental wet dream of halcyon childhood,
A brain tic rippling through the brooding conscious,
A mode of thought both subtle and obtuse,
No reasoning a way through the conditions of the truce,
Between ego and id, and the debt they’ve accrued,
Deluded images of days long past,
Revisionist history and a half-full glass,
Unburdened with a nicotine fix and a naïve complex condition.
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i don't know why you capitalize each line.

interesting imagery but broken so predictably as to make it feel halted and staggered.

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Predictable? Even I didn't know where this would lead!

Capitalization? Habit.
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