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Old 12-18-2006, 04:41 PM   #1
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The span of an animal
Bites down until its river is
Bled and shed of enamel

nerve endings bleed
Heightened where it ripened
Deprived of what it needs

The hand is implied
As accumulated as it is,
Subjects its paint to the sky

My life is to die

A heart is to mine
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Old 12-18-2006, 09:38 PM   #2
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enjoyed the energy and originality of this.
third stanza is a bit weak

I like the last line.

welcome, and thanks for posting!
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Old 12-18-2006, 10:45 PM   #3
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This was cool! I honestly don't get it at all, but I find myself drawn toward things I don't understand more XP Anywho, great job!
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