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| Poetry Poems, Haiku & Tanka etc. |
03-24-2006, 11:21 PM
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Join Date: Feb 2006
Location: Boise
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Beginning of the End
I can't do this alone…
I need someone to guide me home…
You think I enjoy doing this…
Well, I don't.
It's something I just can't facilitate…
The Devil's temptation is just far too great…
You think that I want to be doing this…
Well, I don't.
I'm hurting the ones that I love…
I'm making them feel so much pain…
You think I'm going to stop doing this…
Well, I won't.
The habits are already formed…
There's nothing much else I can do…
You think that I'm going to live this through…
Well, I won't.
I'm crying myself to sleep these days…
I'm crying at school during class…
I'm hoping deep down inside you'll forgive me…
But you won't.
I know you can hear me…
I can taste it in your tears…
I want you to give me a reply…
But you won't.
I'm not going to continue this any longer…
I'm not going to draw this thing out…
You think that I'm overreacting…
Well, I'm not.
I can't think of much else to say…
So I'll just act on my thoughts…
I need to make right the wrong…
So I will.
I love you with all of my heart…
I don't know how I can make you see…
I don't want to hurt you again…
So I won't.
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03-27-2006, 10:16 PM
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Wordsmith
Join Date: Jan 2005
Location: Sailing the darkness of the Cosmos with this planet as my vessel
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Different appeal, cold and morbid, wanting to do what's right but wanting the lust that was lost. Very good work. I like it.
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04-17-2006, 02:51 PM
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Thnx so much 4 reading OW, I really am greatful. Thank you  |
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04-17-2006, 08:13 PM
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Join Date: Dec 2005
Location: Wicklow, Ireland
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It makes me wonder was it forgiven.
An argument I see, one racked with guilt but the unseen person too hurt to listen.
Can't everything go back to the way it was? No it can't, it will never be the same, so in the end. Does the poet really want forgivness and ease his/her conscience? or some way to make everything right again, someway to make the unseen character feel the same old trust again.
All in vain?
So in other words... Really made me think, not only about the poet (protagonist or speaking character whatever it's called) but whoever he/she is apologising too.
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04-18-2006, 01:36 PM
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thnx for reading i appreciate it a lot |
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