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Old 02-22-2006, 08:19 PM   #1
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My Blue Tinian

My Blue Tinian

A place where every face
wears a smile
while saying, “Good day!”
“Good morning!” “Hello!”…
no matter if known
to you or not…
what caring, sharing
people these are,
so far from most you’ve got
in your civilized spot.

An isle, a tiny pile
in the sea
we call “home”…waves foam
ashore and the breeze
frees all from the heat
of the day’s sun…
one blessing, caressing
life here for us,
no fuss, or foul-aired blot
of your citified plot.

A land where little’s planned,
living’s no
woe-filled thing to bring
depression, despair,
tearing one apart…
a tranquil, sweet
treat, granting enchanting
ease for those
who chose to leave Camelot
to you cantankerous lot.
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Old 02-22-2006, 08:37 PM   #2
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Golly that sounds great!
Just the coming trend!
We're all heading there now!
And bringing all our friends!
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Old 02-22-2006, 08:38 PM   #3
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wow, I really like your poetry mammamai. its great. Curious: what gave you the idea for this?
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Old 02-22-2006, 11:56 PM   #4
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I enjoyed this poem. It's nice to read something of yours that's written differently.
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Old 02-23-2006, 03:50 AM   #5
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How are the conveniences there? I am sure you have running water, electricity. Is it small enough that you don't need a car? I remember reading WWII documentaries describing the place built up by the Japanese as a small base.
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Old 02-23-2006, 07:16 AM   #6
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Sure, throw it in our faces as we're forced to live out our days in the smog and cock-roach ridden cities of Amerika. (no that k wasn't a typo)
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Old 02-23-2006, 09:17 PM   #7
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great, jr!... just what this place needs... a gold rush of canucks!

alice... what gave me the idea is the place itself... and having found it and being lucky enough to be able to live here, after 10 years of homeless world-wandering... glad you like my work... for more, just browse my site at will...

thanks pen... actually much of my work is pretty 'different' in construction, but i'm guessing you meant in pov... i do have contented contemplative moments from time to time, hard as that may be to believe... this was one of them...

tef:
How are the conveniences there?

...fairly convenient, thanks...

I am sure you have running water, electricity.

...some of the time... no hot water, but the cold-ish part works... power goes off now and then for minutes to hours at a time, but that just gives me a break from the world news i keep on most of the day...

Is it small enough that you don't need a car?

...for me, it is, since my apt is within walking distance of the shops i need most for groceries... for others, i always can get a ride from my friendly apt caretaker... it's actually about 10 by 5 miles in size...

I remember reading WWII documentaries describing the place built up by the Japanese as a small base.

...it's the place where the a-bombs were loaded onto enola gay and its partner, before being dropped on hiroshima and nagasaki... the peaceful local chamorro population was relocated and returned years after the war... it's a lovely place now, with no sign of war other than a small remnant of a ruin or two...

wayne... hey, nothing's keeping you there, right?... a one-way plane ticket is just under a thousand bucks, if you catch expedia/travelocity/whatever right... living here is cheap and wonderfully simple... let me know when you'll arrive, and i'll come meet you at the dock or what passes for an airport...

hugs to all, m
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Old 04-15-2006, 01:02 AM   #8
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Well, I guess I can't have three rhyming poems in a row, but this one is probably your best I've read so far. I wish I could go there and take my wife. That special place away from everything....With no kids. But just for the weekend....I'd start to miss them after a few days.

Nicely done. Thank You
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Old 04-15-2006, 10:29 PM   #9
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bh...
while many of my poems do rhyme, many don't do so in the 'ordinary' way and some don't rhyme at all... i'm glad you could enjoy this only mildly rhyming one...

we're too off the beaten path for a weekend visit, i'm afraid... it takes two days to fly here from the west coast... but you'll always be welcome, whenever you have the time and airfare to spare...

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