untitled haiku - Writers Forum

emphibian · 02-21-2006, 01:34 PM

before it begins, just to clear, this isn't anyway related to this forum here.

thank you for reading. comments welcome.
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what words of wisdom?
conventions are nothing more
playgrounds for the young

what words of wisdom?
when everyone forgets you?
and you still stay you?

this is just defeat
of concrete conversations
everyone here hides

everybody wants
a chance for them to be heard
forum, an answer

we are not allowed
to speak sometimes because we
just don’t use our heads

the problem here is
everyone here thinks they think
and thinks they are right

the problem here is
everyone thinks they’re special
the fact is they’re not.
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teflon · 02-21-2006, 02:05 PM

great haiku chain. Looks like it came from the Haiku Challenge.
I believe that haikus must have verbs in simple tense, preferably past, no articles, and no inner voice. This I learned in haiku clinic sites.

emphibian · 02-21-2006, 02:11 PM

hi teflon,
thanks for the note there. i'd bear that in mind the next time i write it ya. although this didn't come from the haiku challenge, i'd like to have a look at it. something to challenge myself with then yea.

thanks again.

teflon · 02-21-2006, 02:17 PM

Some of haiku URLs:

http://home.clara.net/pka/haiku/haiku.htm
http://www.scifaiku.com/haiku/
http://www.ahapoetry.com/keirule.htm
http://www.poetrylives.com/SimplyHai...n3/index2.html

see you in the challenge!