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| Poetry Poems, Haiku & Tanka etc. |
02-18-2006, 11:18 AM
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Ink Slinger
Join Date: Nov 2005
Location: Peterborough, Canada
Gender: Male
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in the poetic emergency room
Nurse! Get me my giant stethoscope!
I sense a pulse.
But doctor, I think it's j-
Do it!
And start the imagery transfusion.
wispy bundled starlight
soul beams from cosmic seams
to magnetic chasm eyes
drinking heart's piquant j-
Doctor! The adjective count is skyrocketing,
adverbs are off the the chart-
Damnit! Hook up a bag of the sexual stuff!
your pistil nuzzles my stamen
penetrating
thrumming sunlit
bee wing vibrations
catapulting me-
Doctor-
Later nurse.
But-
Shit! Shit! Shit!
He needs a boost!
Let's
---------------------------------------------------------------------------reposition
--------------------him
---------------------------------------------------------------------and
get the profanity paddles now!
Right to the c-words
long and short-
Clear!
Again!
It's no use.
We've lost him.
Doctor.
The patient's watch...
It just stopped.
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02-18-2006, 11:29 AM
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Best Seller
Join Date: Nov 2005
Location: Catalunya, Spain
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Well, my friend, this was an unexpected surprise. I just logged in and "omagosh" i get to be the 1st one to comment on this wacky, wonderful, won-ton poetic opry! I will never perceive Pistle and Stamin in the same manner as before...you've given them both a new imagery for me. I thought this was quite fun and well done--you went a bit over the top after
"Let's..."
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02-18-2006, 11:39 AM
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Profound Writer
Join Date: May 2005
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Out of every poem I've ever read in my entire life...
this poem is my favorite.
Congratulations.
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02-18-2006, 11:48 AM
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Best Seller
Join Date: Dec 2005
Location: Just east of Toronto,Ont, Canada
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Oh this is amazing. I love it. It's hillarious.
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02-18-2006, 12:44 PM
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Ink Slinger
Join Date: Nov 2005
Location: Peterborough, Canada
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eleda: over the top, moi? thanks for commenting
smalls: High praise indeed. Thanks very much.
caitlin: glad you like. I had a few chuckles writing it.
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02-18-2006, 01:06 PM
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Best Seller
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"Doctor! The adjective count is skyrocketing,
adverbs are off the the chart-"
LOL - Sounds like the patient was lost to a prose-coma. 
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02-18-2006, 01:37 PM
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haw! haw! haw! haw!
Quote:
Doctor! The adjective count is skyrocketing,
adverbs are off the the chart-
Damnit! Hook up a bag of the sexual stuff!
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and ho! ho! ho! ho! ho!
this really was funny.
and i usually hate this type of shit.
le tongue, le cheek maclean.
vodka |
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02-18-2006, 01:49 PM
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Nice bit of fun, JR. Enjoyed it.
Jimbob
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The blackbird must be flying.
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02-18-2006, 02:06 PM
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Adept Writer
Join Date: Jan 2006
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ten points for originality j.r. and another ten for making me choke on my sandwich. i'm so happy you post your work on this forum. queasy nomenclature
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02-18-2006, 02:36 PM
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Ink Slinger
Join Date: Nov 2005
Location: Peterborough, Canada
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Frank: Thanks for dropping by and commenting. I appreciate it.
v: merci buckets. glad you got a giggle
JB: y'all gettin' gushy on me?
mjk: I'll chalk 'em up. Glad you got a gaggle.
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