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| Poetry Poems, Haiku & Tanka etc. |
02-13-2006, 09:04 AM
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work heavy mother
work heavy mother
keeps baby safe to watch bugs
dance from stalk to stalk
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02-13-2006, 10:44 AM
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Fly, hop, sing and eat.
bugs live just for now.
Baby watches and wonders.
Jimbob
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The river is moving.
The blackbird must be flying.
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02-13-2006, 04:58 PM
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what are those bugs doing on my strawberry plants?!! playful and inventive. snapping figs.
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02-14-2006, 01:15 AM
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jimbob- delightful, as always. i'm going to have to start throwing random words at you too, so my gratitude doesn't become... redundant. fanciful locusts
j.r.- haha, i was wondering about that. are those really strawberries? smothered horticulture
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02-14-2006, 01:46 AM
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reminds me of j.r's short poetry writing style.
indeed good read though.
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02-14-2006, 01:49 AM
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Originally Posted by T.R. LeJeune
reminds me of j.r's short poetry writing style.
indeed good read though.
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thanks for coming to read.
if you look closely, you'll find j.r. and i post one haiku a day each, both of them drawn from the same book. we're always looking for more to join us, as it is proving delightful, entertaining and most importantly, a fantastic way to hone writing skills.
damn, where's that link to the haiku a day thread...?
ta-da! go here, if you're interested.
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02-14-2006, 01:50 AM
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What exatcly is haiku, please message me about this subject. I wish to broaden my knowledge.
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02-14-2006, 01:54 AM
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t.r.- it can be a lot of different things. surprisingly enough, there's some talk on that too, going on here. share your thoughts?
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02-14-2006, 02:46 AM
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I want to say I like this but I have to confess I don't quite get what is going on - what is a work heavy mother? I seem to have missed the connection that will make sense of the baby watching bugs...
I have had this feeling before when reading haiku that is translated from Japanese, but it is unusual to see it in english-only
It rolls nicely though.
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02-14-2006, 04:21 AM
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ah, yes, i was a little worried about the one line about the mother and then no relation back to her at all. in the picture, the baby is strapped to the mother's back as she is working in the fields. the baby is staring at the plants, eyes aglow with wonder. thanks for coming by to read and thanks for asking.
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02-14-2006, 07:30 AM
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j.r.- haha, i was wondering about that. are those really strawberries?
of course, Tibetan ones, but they are very close to the ground so you can't see them in the picture. 
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