Response - Writers Forum

J.R. MacLean · 02-12-2006, 10:14 AM

bob: I can relate to your quest for more feeling. suggestions: write in first person; use the senses; use the sounds of the words to evoke responses:

I awoke to find your letter, slipped smooth between my fingers

I like the content and message of the poem alot. Good luck.

103_smalls · 02-12-2006, 11:29 PM

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Originally Posted by J.R. MacLean

bob: I can relate to your quest for more feeling. suggestions: write in first person; use the senses; use the sounds of the words to evoke responses:

I awoke to find your letter, slipped smooth between my fingers

I like the content and message of the poem alot. Good luck.

Amen. Everything he said is wonderful.

Especially the "use the senses" bit. The best way to relate to a reader, to make a piece personal, is to use their own senses.