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Interesting use of imagery there..
Usually I prefer poetry that's a little longer, but you were able to capture quite a bit with such few words. Claps for that one. The only thing I would consider revising is the use of punctuation, because you have absolutely nothing until the period at the end, making it seem like one long, involved run-on sentence.
Other than that, I enjoyed it quite a bit. Nice work.
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