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02-09-2006, 11:01 PM
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Adept Writer
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Pure Love
When I looked for pure love, I never could find it
in the short-lived hot passion of sweethearts
or instinctive affection of mother and child,
not even the longing of saints for their Lord.
I found it instead at a shelter for derelicts
Where a fragile old man changed his gibbering wife's diaper,
wiped her butt clean and gave her a kiss
right on the back of the neck.
Jimbob
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The river is moving.
The blackbird must be flying.
Wallace Stevens
Last edited by Jimbob : 02-10-2006 at 04:22 PM.
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02-09-2006, 11:09 PM
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Wordsmith
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A devine story of what our truelove is and what we will do for our loves. A very good poem. Nice description on words, very powerful, and all-together, well written. Very good work Jimmybob.
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02-10-2006, 11:09 AM
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Thanks, Oasis.
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The river is moving.
The blackbird must be flying.
Wallace Stevens
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02-10-2006, 11:57 AM
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Ink Slinger
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beautiful JB.
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02-10-2006, 03:06 PM
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you're going to start hating me for correcting your spelling, aren't you? it's "derelict"
this is just beautiful. i love the last line because it's not where you would expect a kiss to go but it fits so perfectly. ahh, love...
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02-10-2006, 10:31 PM
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JR & mjk,
Thanks for checking in on this one. And, for catching my spelling and punctuation errors, ((mjk))
Jimbob
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The river is moving.
The blackbird must be flying.
Wallace Stevens
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02-11-2006, 06:59 AM
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Profound Writer
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We could all use that kind of Love, thank you for letting us see it can still exist and in the least lovely places.
Lorlie
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02-11-2006, 08:20 PM
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Thanks, Lorlie
More than orgasms
more than prayer and blessings.
who can define it?
Jimbob
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The river is moving.
The blackbird must be flying.
Wallace Stevens
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02-12-2006, 02:23 PM
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indefinable
impossible to depict
but we'll keep trying
jimbob- is that a hug, or you strangling me?  (JB)
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02-12-2006, 03:35 PM
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Best Seller
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really, really special jimbob, thanks
-andy
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purple junk diluted iguana infested snarkleberries hungry traveller
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02-12-2006, 06:49 PM
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Banned
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Now this is the true reality of real love. This might not be a picture a lot of people want to think about, but when you look to what you are actually saying, it speaks on a lot of different levels. I like it a lot.
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02-13-2006, 10:30 AM
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Thanks, Andy. Jade, I'm glad you like it.
Jimbob
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The river is moving.
The blackbird must be flying.
Wallace Stevens
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