Mackb

arrogance crystallized teen
can’t see past your nose
wrong, yeah right

unique view of life
freshly defined
no else is right

the world is black and white
all absolutes, all wrong
damn all authorities

reality bites back
pay the bills or live
among the homeless

reluctantly grow up
choose to be criminal
or respectable

earn some cash
join the hated system
understand more

then shake your head
at those who dare
to be younger than you

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103_smalls

A good, and accurate description, not only of the typical teenage mind, but also the typical growing-up of a kid.

My only criticism is that you describe teens always having to be right in the first and second stanza... no other idea repeats itself in that manner, and so it seems repetitive.

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character1_Caitlin

Good one Mackb, I like it. getting old sucks don't it? moi old? Never !!!!!!

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Mackb

yeah you're right Smalls, but it bears repeating, to me at least.

thanks and to Catlin as well, an d yes getting old sucks, especially when the body starts to rebel for all the abuse its suffered over the years.

As the song says, I'm 18 till I die.

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ms. vodka

some are easier to identify with than others, aren't they?

interesting thoughts here, although you're slipping into the general a bit more than i'd like to see. think small, the grain of sand and all that. let us grasp the general from the specifics you use. i'd like to know your personal experience with this teen, where you saw him or her, what he or she did that made you catch their arrogance.

wishing you well,
jen

Mackb

hi Ms V, thanks for visiting, I;m not sure what your first statement refers to a nd as for specifics, I'd be burned at the stake for anything more personal, since that person reads this site. But I do get your drift. It was an attempt to vent my spleen and cover more than one person on purpose.

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J.R. MacLean

good topic Mack. It's the thirty five year old teenagers that I really shake my head at. I also shake my head at teens like my son, who, as people, are light years ahead of where I was at their age. cheers.

xCharlottexShadowsx

Amazing, describes the teenage mind to a tee. Well the avrage one at least. Brilliant writing<3

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ms. vodka

i meant that some teens are easier to identify with than others.

i still say specifics, but you are the poet, no?

teflon

I would like to feed off your haiku chains to revive this fulfilling activity. I think I am often in your state of mind.

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Mackb

Teflon in my state
how sad for your sun-baked brain
but I welcome you

give 'er man, go for it. I see your stuff int he winter Haiku thread, I'm going to start another soon.

How about positive haikus? no morbid stuff.

give it a while, you know you want to....

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SwanZa

Ahhh this is great! It's ME as a teen. Can't believe that was over ten years ago...

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Mackb

Lightning fast how those years go and then one day, we become our parents, sending us screaming from the room, or blusing with pride.

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teflon

I am concentrating...we went away for a long weekend from Thur to Sun morning, to a scenic mountain chalet, where we breathed in some new inspiration.

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Wyndstar

Hi Mackb

I like how this begins with a teen putting themselves on the pedestal, and then gradually, uncomfortably, finding himself down with the rest of us geezers in reality. It definetly makes me wary about the inevitability of having a teenager.

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