Kat

Round, milky
lucious
cherry tipped
cinnamon sprinkles

begging your tongue
to dance along
the curves
smooth and sweet

delicate lines
blueberry syrup
trickle down
pooling in the cleft

the warmth
of your breath
melting
into puddles.

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mjk

yay! i love this, and not just because it's about ice cream. it's very sensual and appealing and leaves me wanting. ooh, yes, also... it's "cinnamon" i believe. thanks for posting this!

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Kat

I always end up writing about food when it's not really what I want to say. I suppose that the title breasts would get more reads though. I was hoping it was rather ambiguous. I'm glad that you liked it though, as ice cream. Thanks for the correction.

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mjk

yes, mention breasts and everyone comes running. i love reading descriptions of food... it's always very sensual, sexual and provocative to me. this poem is a prime example of doing just that for me. it is ambiguous, definitely has double meaning and leaves the reader pondering. i just commented on ice cream cuz i want some and this made me want it even more.

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J.R. MacLean

breasts works for me. Definitely. Oh yes. nicely done.

cbaird14

Very sensual, somewhat witty, only one technical question, can breath melt into puddles. Breath is a good allusion to breasts but not a very accurate picture maybe. Perhaps I misread

Chris