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Old 02-03-2006, 03:01 AM   #1
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Cool A Sestina for Sestinas to Drive Me Insane

A Sestina for Sestinas to Drive Me Insane*

A challenge from which I’m too stubborn to refrain:
This funny game of words the French often play.
But no rhyme to sestina! It’s too hard to maintain!
In this complex system to draw words from the brain,
Committed to paper to halt the one who complains,
“A much needed break from haiku to keep sane!”

Who knew it was poetry needed to keep sane?
The naming of names I promise I’ll refrain,
Only a penguin would have the audacity to complain,
“Too few syllables with which I can play,
There’s not enough words to engage a bird’s brain,
Yet with form exact my attention you’ll maintain.”

With words which sound the same, the rhyme is maintained.
Although soon it must end, otherwise, I’ll go insane.
I’ve no wish for repetition (repeating repeats) in my brain,
So after this is done, from poetic verse I’ll refrain.
There’s too many other ways in which my pen plays,
But I suppose I know better than some to complain.

Next time I shall pay no heed a poet in complaint,
Of the lack of excitement it’s my job to maintain.
But as it unfolds, the sestina’s great fun to play,
Although not much helpful when it comes to staying sane.
When the next challenge appears, I know I’ll refrain
‘Cuz I’m going batty with rhymes on the brain.

O Sestina! How you already bore my brain!
Such strict limits I can’t help but complain!
These end words, these lines all sing the same refrain,
This order so diverse yet simplistic rhyme to maintain.
I’ve caught myself in a poem, methodically going insane.
Only nine lines remain. Then, that’s it, I won’t play!

Yet I yielded to the task, this game of verse to play
And the one to pay the consequence is my poor ravaged brain.
Oh well, too late, what good is the poet who remains sane?
Perhaps it’s just instinct for the poet to complain
I’ve got sentences to scribble, imagination to maintain
Next time, I’ll know, from silly poems I'll refrain.

This amusement I played, so you’d better not complain.
I’ve exercised my brain - for your entertainment - I maintain
And rhyming sestinas? to stay sane, you’ll refrain.

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now go write me a haiku!

*i'd just like to apologize. i promise i won't ever do this to any of you or myself again. thanks for getting this far at least.
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Old 02-03-2006, 08:15 AM   #2
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mjk: what a nice chuckle- all the way through- to start the morning with. As to my knowledge I've read only one other sestina, I'm putting this one definitely in my top two.
cheers and sacramental junipers.
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Old 02-03-2006, 08:32 AM   #3
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Not so easy, huh?

I wonder if there's a disorder which causes people to talk in rhyme...

A quick titles only search in the Poetry forum for 'sestina' turns up a few. It's a truly bizarre form.
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Looks tough, and I'm sure it is. Check out Elizabeth Bishop's "Sestina". It's quite good. Sounds like you will never do this again, if you do try I think it would benefit the poem if you tried to use your words in different ways, see Bishop for an example.

props to you for trying my friend
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Old 02-03-2006, 12:34 PM   #5
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j.r.- i'm most pleased to give your morning a laugh. you should read more sestinas and watch as mine falls further and further down the your favorite list. personally, i'm hoping to never read this poem again. punished taragon.

pawn- :p ahem... haiku?

chris- thanks for coming to read, leaving your thoughs and of course the reading reccomendation. you're very astute in your observations. i think a large part of the reason I detest this poem is because the words wouldn't do anything different with themselves. just the same stuff, rearranged in different ways. i even went through some of auden's sestinas to gather inspiration, but in the name of proving a point, i came out with this dreadful thing.

i solemnly swear i will not butcher the form of sestina any further. i'm not saying i won't compose them (i actually had a great deal of fun with them when I was in high school) but i sure as hell won't be rhyming them or trying to poke fun at pawn while doing so. to repeat some wise words: it does not do to force poetry. above is a prime example.
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Thanks for the compliment, and yes you are right on the words did not lend themselves to other meanings. That seems to be the key to a good sestina.
But let me put this in context, i have never, and may never attempt one.

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I loved it! Heh, it was a bad sestina about how bad it is.

Sestinas are rare...and I don't know why. They are a blast to write and so complex a form that you never seem to understand the workings of the phrasing. I've only written two, and one was a collaboration with Penelope. I believe that's still sittin' in the workshop. Thanks for putting a smile on my face!

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Your so talented -- even writing a bad sestina your great at LOL
Its funny.
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chris- i think you should try one.

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Heh, it was a bad sestina about how bad it is.
that about sums it up. hehe. i'm glad it gave a smile. thanks for reading.

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even writing a bad sestina your great at
hahahaha, i'll take that as a compliment and run away before you can tell me differently. thanks for coming to read, always much appreciated.

now, let's give this poem a proper death and burial.
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