The Funeral Feast (A little dark) - Writers Forum

Psycho6058 · 01-10-2006, 09:44 AM

The flowers were arranged by a priest who was deranged
he cut the blooms off each and every stem.
“You see, these flowers sinned, (and as he cut he grinned)
they looked too happy while we sang the hymn.”

The pews were painted black, the Bibles (in a stack)
were neatly piled all around the floor.
When the mourners came that day, to say goodbye and pray,
they tripped on those piled by the door.

The ones that didn’t leave sat down so they could grieve
where they could keep an eye on Father Dave.
He offered up a prayer for those assembled there,
then went to meet the family at the grave.

The family were all crying even though they all were trying
to stay composed and keep a face of steel.
When he finally found the place he started saying grace
and carved the guest of honor for a meal.

Some stayed back to pray as they led the priest away,
Looking back with a look that they could feel.
“It’s like I always said—once they’re dead they’re dead
no sense in wasting such a lovely meal."

Psycho6058 · 01-11-2006, 08:34 AM

I guess maybe a little too dark?

mjk · 01-11-2006, 12:49 PM

never too dark. this was playful and macabre. great rhythm. i'm having all sorts of fun musing about the symbolism. thanks for posting it.

103_smalls · 01-11-2006, 01:40 PM

ssssssssssick!!

I found that it didn't read quite as smoothly as your typical poem, but I did enjoy it.

Psycho6058 · 01-11-2006, 05:11 PM

Thank you MJK and Smalls, you warped little devils you.

Wyndstar · 01-11-2006, 05:21 PM

My need for the sick and twisted has been sated in this one sitting, though I won't mourn the fate of the priest who granted it.

Bet he's a hoot during grace.

Black whimsy really suits you, Psycho (hmmm).

ross · 01-11-2006, 05:53 PM

Pretty good. A touch Spike Milligan (although I'm sure you have no idea who that is) and that's a fine compliment.
We don't see too many limericks in these parts. That may have been overdue if unfashionable.

mammamaia · 01-11-2006, 08:36 PM

Not quite a limerick, though close,
of the weird, it's a healthy 'nuff dose.
Wayne's aptly named psycho,
like some toys made by Tyco...
this poem's pretty good, but gross!

Psycho6058 · 01-12-2006, 08:14 AM

ross-I know Spike was known as the "godfather of alternative comedy" and that he did some work with Mel Brooks (History of the World Part I) and Peter Sellers, also did some acting ( I remember him from Yellowbeard). Thanks for the comments.
Maia- ROFL, thanks for my personal lymerick, however, that wasn't the meter I was attempting a "Robert Service" style of writing.