mike5446g

Sullen intestinal
Sutures that keep it so
Your voice came on like a radio
It told me to reap all I can sow

And this is no holiday
Could not be another way
Could not simply
seperate...

Bombs on a TV screen
Sound alright while whistling
Oh obtuse obscenity
Hey arcane serenity

Can't find the right polarity
Utter lack of symmetry

or tell me was it sympathy?
As I was temporarily
blinded
by this gleam

Why must this silence intervene...?



Manufactured neighbors
Wide assortment of flavors
This flawed nomenclature
Renders thought endangered

Well say what you think you should say!
Can you do what you want to say?
See freedom is not what you believe it is
Seven letters aim but they'll forever miss


Essence existentially
Just one thought could set you free
The so-called end of irony

Two tramps hanging dead from a tree
Must mean they are through waiting


Time
an incurable disease

gohn67

Hey Mike,
I read both of them. Waiting for Godot, huh. Heh. I'm reading through the play right now, only about a third done.

So that's why I clicked on this, and it was interesting to read both poems, which look almost the same, but are slightly different, giving different views on the same topic.

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mike5446g

Actually, the first one (for estragon) was my first draft, only I accidentally posted it before realizing that it should be for Vladimir, which is something you will come to realize after finishing the play.

Godot is completely mind-blowing, and I highly recommend anything by Samuel Beckett.

J.R. MacLean

The lines have a nice rhythm at times, but I have to confess the poem evokes little feeling in me except for the lines "one single thought can set you free/ the so-called end of irony" which are terrific. Will check out Estragon.
jrmac

mike5446g

To convey no emotion or meaning actually is the point of the lines.

Now let me make clear on the other poem. I typed it as the original draft to this work here, I was about to post it until I realized I had typed Estragon in error, since the board was running slow, I attempted to correct the mistake before the topic was posted. Now somehow, I have two poems with two different subtitles, that are nearly identical in body, posted at once. I have since made enough changes to the Vladimir version to thoroughly confuse a number of people.

J.R. MacLean

Couldn't you have achieved that purpose more thoroughly simply by leaving the page blank?

mike5446g

Well that's what I tried doing at first, but the system wouldn't let me post it. Then I had to make all this stuff up.

I tell ya, censorship sucks.

mike5446g

The last few times I've gone over it have been to a sort of melody. I can't decide exactly what this thing is.