Shinyui

Soaring through the canyons,
knowingly taking flight.
Upon the backs of dragons
With fear abolished,
fight.

To where they lead us
we do not know.
The mind shall twist us,
but shaln't let go.

Thousands of feet
suspended high in the air;
If you should ever fall,
I'll catch you with care.

Held high in place
with nothing but love
I'll descend through the heavens
Your saviour from above. . . . .

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ms. vodka

okay, what's up with stanza one? there's no rhyme and the repetition of the last line is not working.

the rest of the rhyme is okay, but the rhythm seems a bit off in places.

i don't know, this feels somehow incomplete to me.

vodka

TMMC

I'd have to agree. I like it alright, and the subject matter is cool, but it does feel incomplete.

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