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Poetry Poems, Haiku & Tanka etc.

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Old 11-30-2005, 10:22 AM   #1
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Dark Angel

The two now cling so desperately
To each other and they bleed
What once was harmless bickering
Turned now to just surviving

Captured for what they weren’t
No money bags so now they hurt
Hidden away in a small shack
Tied to the butcher’s rack
Each other’s company to share
In dying moments, no one to care

The captures gone to find real gold
Leaving them to age and mold
A drunken mother, a fallen dad
Won’t notice the blood of what they had
Their last hope, each other’s arms
And silent prayers, like little charms,
To draw a hope that had fled so fast
So drawn out it didn’t last

But then the joy of not returning
To the home, were they’d been burning
A happy release from the chains of life
Never again to see their parent’s strife
If only they can stand the pain
Then leave the garments’ bloody stain

But one won’t go without the other
Hand in hand they shake and shutter
Death prolonged for fear of loss
Neither will leave one on the cross
They sit and wait for death to come
To take them both under his thumb

Look out to his darkening light
The dark angel flies high tonight
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Old 11-30-2005, 10:43 AM   #2
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Great work! Personally I love the image of the dark angel flying high, but the entire piece flows well and the rhyme is a joy to read. One thing I will say is that the capitalising at the start of each line can be a bit irritating at times.

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