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Old 11-29-2005, 11:53 PM   #1
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What can be said that hasn't been said before?
I won the bet that was made today, and I lost a great deal more.

Pride went out the window.
As well as the chance to heal.
I'll never remember the exit room,
the distractions were far too real.
And still alone are the facts and the pressures,
racked with pain, to pathetic too feel.
Anger flew in formation, like seagulls,
It wasn't your wallet that I tried to steal.

Instead, your heart and soul were what I reached for.
You lost the bet that was made today, but you gained a fair deal more.
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Old 11-30-2005, 12:21 AM   #2
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I scanned it and caught a few spelling mistakes:

"the distractions were far *TOO* real."

and...

"racked with pain, *TOO* pathetic to feel."

and...

"What can be said that hasn't *BEEN* said before?"

As far as the poem goes, nothing special, but as long as it means something to you and it comes from the heart that's what matters, so keep it up.
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Old 11-30-2005, 01:01 AM   #4
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No problem
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