cheer_arc2oo9

Thinking about you depresses me
Invisionments of you in my sleep I see
Having more options than I can believe
But all I want is youYou and only you, no one else
I don't know why
But I can't get you off my mind
The world around me melts whenever you go by
Whenever you talk to me I feel like i could fly
I just want you to hold me,to hug me to say you love me
I just want to be with you knowing that I am safe and that you won't play me.

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chelseafagan

I would say that your best bet is to try and be a little more metaphorical. Obviously there is a lot of raw emotion here, but to make it a bit more interesting, you could play with some symbolism or analogy. Also, working on the rythm of it to make it flow a bit better would help. As of now, it's a bit of a choppy read.

But in general, wherever there is powerful emotion, the words will follow.

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