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Old 11-29-2005, 07:02 PM   #1
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I Have a Question For You

When I put this bullet in my brain
will you follow far behind?
Will all my stupid yearnings
find your life run out of time?

And when I take this pill
my simple little crime,
will I find a place for you
and me to cross that line?

So when I dive out long
and fall from up so high,
will you fucking even care,
will you even cry?

Because time is running short
on my platitudal lie.
So when I am found hanging dead
will you also die?

I want to know that when I take
that last and final sigh,
will you follow these lines again
as just a silly rhyme?
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Old 11-29-2005, 10:27 PM   #2
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Very stong poem. I loved it all but I loved the first stanza the most.
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Old 11-29-2005, 10:29 PM   #3
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