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| Poetry Poems, Haiku & Tanka etc. |
11-28-2005, 04:09 AM
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The Day's Deed
Regards
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Being deep and appearing deep.--- Whoever knows he is deep, strives for clarity; whoever would like to appear deep to the crowd, strives for obscurity. For the crowd considers anything deep if only it cannot see to the bottom: the crowd is so timid and afraid of going into the water. -Nietzsche
Last edited by Harry Haller : 07-05-2007 at 10:12 AM.
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11-28-2005, 04:50 AM
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Ink Slinger
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I love the use of sound and images here, skylor.
Quote:
the wind, a sheet
sewn between lake and sky
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Beautiful.
As for a title, Time Turned Tame?
Thanks for sharing!
Slayer
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Battle not with monsters lest ye become a monster. And if you gaze into the abyss, the abyss gazes also into you. - Friedrich Wilhelm Nietzsche
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11-28-2005, 05:51 AM
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Slayer,
Thanks for the nice comments.
I was thinking something about the day being for sale. I think most people will miss that. Maybe "The Day's Deed" or something. That would play off two of the poems ideas. I think that will be it. I generally don't like to use lines from the poem in the title. Sometimes but not usually.
Regards,
Skylor
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Being deep and appearing deep.--- Whoever knows he is deep, strives for clarity; whoever would like to appear deep to the crowd, strives for obscurity. For the crowd considers anything deep if only it cannot see to the bottom: the crowd is so timid and afraid of going into the water. -Nietzsche
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11-28-2005, 06:12 AM
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Ink Slinger
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I know what you mean, Skylor but when all else fails, you know?
Slayer
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Battle not with monsters lest ye become a monster. And if you gaze into the abyss, the abyss gazes also into you. - Friedrich Wilhelm Nietzsche
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11-28-2005, 10:38 PM
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I think I am relatively satisfied with The Day's Deed. I understand Slayer. Usually if I am patient enough something will come to me eventually.
Regards,
Skylor
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Being deep and appearing deep.--- Whoever knows he is deep, strives for clarity; whoever would like to appear deep to the crowd, strives for obscurity. For the crowd considers anything deep if only it cannot see to the bottom: the crowd is so timid and afraid of going into the water. -Nietzsche
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11-28-2005, 11:06 PM
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Nice piece of work, Skylor; I enjoyed reading it
Jimbob
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11-29-2005, 10:12 PM
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Thanks for the comments Jimbob.
Regards,
Skylor
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Being deep and appearing deep.--- Whoever knows he is deep, strives for clarity; whoever would like to appear deep to the crowd, strives for obscurity. For the crowd considers anything deep if only it cannot see to the bottom: the crowd is so timid and afraid of going into the water. -Nietzsche
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