Writers Forum - WritingForums.com Home Rules FAQ Members Groups Calendar Gallery Search
» Sign Up «

Welcome to Writing Forums, one of the fastest growing writing communties on the web.

You are currently viewing our boards as a guest which gives you limited access to view most discussions, articles and photo galleries. By joining our free community you will be able to talk with other writers, get feedback on your work to improve your writing skills, discuss ideas, share tips & tricks, network and make friends!

Registration is fast, simple and absolutely free so please, join our community today!

If you have any problems with the registration process or your account login, please contact support.
  Search Forums
Lit.Org - Bootcamp for writers. Post your work and other writers review it, it's that easy.

Advanced Search



Go Back   Writers Forum - WritingForums.com > Creativity > Poetry
Register FAQ Members List Calendar Search Today's Posts Mark Forums Read

Poetry Poems, Haiku & Tanka etc.

Reply
 
Thread Tools
Old 11-18-2005, 08:40 AM   #1
Addict
 
Join Date: Jan 2005
Location: The foothills of the Chilterns, England
Posts: 121
AndyH
For Sale

The unused double-decker
freewheels down the village hill,
the engine's pitch descending.

Boxes fill the living-room,
yellow plants, old post;
a bird bangs into the window
every few months.

My mum would at least
have put on her sheepskin
coat and scrubbed the blood
and feathers off
with a J-cloth.

She would fry an egg,
boil up some tea and
sit in a foldout chair
in her sheepskin coat
reading Pablo Neruda,
her leather boots
crunching the snow.

She left years ago;
now my dad sorts out
the shopping-bags
of maps
and monochrome
holiday photographs
of a great-grandfather
sitting in his wicker chair
in his three-piece suit
on the beach at Cadzand.*




*a popular bathing resort in Holland in the thirties, now in decline. My ancestry is Dutch.
__________________
"The greatest in life lies not through never falling, but rising every time we fall." - Nelson Mandela

Last edited by AndyH : 11-18-2005 at 12:20 PM.
AndyH is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 11-18-2005, 09:23 AM   #2
Ink Slinger
 
slayerofangels's Avatar
 
Join Date: Oct 2005
Location: Ireland
Gender: Male
Posts: 2,378
slayerofangels is on a distinguished road
This is a striking piece but it puzzles me immensely. I'll confess that while I love the imagery and the flow throughout, the actual purpose of the piece eludes me.

Great Work
Slayer
__________________

For Sale: One soul. Mint condition, never been used.

Battle not with monsters lest ye become a monster. And if you gaze into the abyss, the abyss gazes also into you. - Friedrich Wilhelm Nietzsche
slayerofangels is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 11-18-2005, 11:07 AM   #3
Addict
 
Join Date: Jan 2005
Location: The foothills of the Chilterns, England
Posts: 121
AndyH
I totally understand, sorry. I only posted half a piece, it's here in its entirety now.
__________________
"The greatest in life lies not through never falling, but rising every time we fall." - Nelson Mandela
AndyH is offline   Reply With Quote
Reply


Currently Active Users Viewing This Thread: 1 (0 members and 1 guests)
 
Thread Tools

Posting Rules
You may not post new threads
You may not post replies
You may not post attachments
You may not edit your posts

vB code is On
Smilies are On
[IMG] code is On
HTML code is Off
Trackbacks are Off
Pingbacks are Off
Refbacks are Off


All times are GMT -5. The time now is 07:20 PM.
Powered by vBulletin, Copyright ©2000-2007, Jelsoft Enterprises Ltd.
LinkBacks Enabled by vBSEO 3.1.0


 
You are NOT Logged In.
User Name:

Password



Newsletter

Subscribe to Majestic
the official newsletter of Writing Forums and lit.org
Email:


Related Links

Link to Us:
Writing Forums - Discussions for Writers