Spf 600 - Writers Forum

Psycho6058 · 11-17-2005, 09:41 AM

I should know better, but I never learn.
I went to the beach and got a sunburn.
I used some sun block, but not very much,
now it hurts like hell wherever I touch.

I went to the beach on sort of a whim,
and forgot to protect my sensitive skin.
I shouldn’t expose my poor skin at all,
which peels like wallpaper off of the wall.

You’d think I’m a snake, the way that I shed,
sometimes I think I’d be better off dead.
I’ll bathe in Noxema and spray on Bactine.
The ritual I go through makes quite a scene.

So, if you are fair skinned like this writer is,
stay away from the ocean to avoid all of this.
If a trip to the beach creeps into your head,
remember all this and stay inside instead.

slayerofangels · 11-17-2005, 09:45 AM

lmao! Great stuff Psycho, loved the rhyme and the flow of it. And the use of such a common(and highly annoying) affliction brought a smile to my face.

Slayer

TMMC · 11-17-2005, 12:20 PM

After being gone for a while, I've come back and re-read many of your poems, and I strongly feel you need to make a book and get it published. I'd buy it in a heartbeat.

mN.sparroW · 11-17-2005, 01:41 PM

It's frozen here. Beaches sounds nice.

Starik · 11-17-2005, 04:28 PM

When I was young and tough
(or merely dumb enough)
I’d work out in the sun
Until the work was done.

And usually, I was done too—sort of a medium rare! LOL!

“We get too soon old and too late smart” has been a frequent way of life for me.

Hope you heal quickly, friend. You have my sympathy.

Shinyui · 11-17-2005, 10:23 PM

Lol Psycho, I love your work.
It has such a light feel to it in some pieces, like this one. However all your pieces are a joy to read, and absolutely a delight to analyse if the opportunity should arise. I agree with TMMC, I'd buy that book in a heartbeat.
Then again I buy things on impulse -_-'

Regards and keep up the great poems

Shin

Psycho6058 · 11-18-2005, 07:11 AM

Slayer- TMMC- mN.sparroW- Starik & Shin, thank you all so much for your kind words, if you've read much of my material you know it's not all this light in fact some of it is downright dark, but I was in a whimsical mood yesterday.

mammamaia · 11-18-2005, 10:22 AM

painfully cute, wayne!

fyi, in just days, i'll be heading out of the snow here in toronto, to the sun and sand of a tiny and truly 'pacific' pacific isle, and can't wait to get there!... fortunately, i'm blessed with italian/sicilian olive-complected skin that only gets darker and darker in 'il sole'...

hugs, maia

Psycho6058 · 11-18-2005, 10:36 AM

Thanks, Maia, you lucky lady. Have a good time.

mammamaia · 11-18-2005, 10:44 AM

it's a permanent move, not a vacation [what's that?], so i'm looking forward to a whole new 'phase' of this final phase of my life... thanks for the good wishes...

hugs, m

Psycho6058 · 11-18-2005, 02:24 PM

Thank you very much Maria.