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Old 11-17-2005, 01:54 AM   #1
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SHE STOOD IN A SHADOWED DOORWAY

by Robert Davidson

She stood in a shadowed doorway
Awaiting the appointed time of delight
Eyes mocking love as
Lips of lust gleam in a moon-blanched night.

She stood in a shadowed doorway
When I shattered the dark with a light
Claiming a fierce kiss on
The porcelain pallor of a face so white.

She stood in a shadowed doorway
The touch of her body against mine stuns
As our sexes meet
Vaster than explosions of burst suns.

Our lone paths cross, then are blown apart forever
As I got what I wanted, and she her cash did recover.
The scowl of pleasure's lips now scorn me ever
Point down to the pit, mocking this sated lover.

She stood in a shadowed doorway
Her look of reproach unnerves, conceives
A cool challenge while
My lust blew away like dead winter leaves.
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Old 11-17-2005, 02:53 PM   #2
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Good imagery.

wondering why you dropped the repetition in the second to last stanza, though.

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