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| Poetry Poems, Haiku & Tanka etc. |
10-31-2005, 12:54 PM
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Ink Slinger
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Haunt Fox (Haiku in a different style)
Curled up, bushy tail,
Sharp eyes, pricking ears alert.
Haunt fox watches here.
Feet padding softly,
Six-toed tracks left behind him.
Hunters coming fast.
Tracks have disappeared,
From deep-fallen, moonlit snow.
Hounds are silent now.
Clever-one watching.
Hounds and hunters all confused.
Wild-one safe above.
Wily-one goes home,
Free to play again some day.
Wild chase, laughing race.
Curled up, bushy tail,
Sharp eyes, pricking ears alert.
Haunt fox watches here.
Last edited by Cold Twilight : 12-03-2005 at 05:17 PM.
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11-12-2005, 09:00 AM
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Ink Slinger
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Multi-stanzad haiku, very interesting you may have something there.
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12-01-2005, 07:17 PM
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Ink Slinger
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Thanks
Thanks for the encouragement...I've been working on this one for a while. Thought it might work...but maybe not...so thanks.
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12-01-2005, 07:47 PM
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I liked it.
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12-02-2005, 12:13 PM
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Ink Slinger
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Thanks...glad you did.
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12-03-2005, 06:21 AM
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I liked this too. I'd suggest you edit out one of the 'clever-one's though.
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12-03-2005, 05:17 PM
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Ink Slinger
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Hmm...
Not sure, but I'll try it. Thanks for the comment.
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05-05-2006, 04:32 PM
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Wordsmith
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its good, its awkaward but only because im not a haiku person. But its good. I like the image that formed in my mind.
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05-05-2006, 05:23 PM
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Ink Slinger
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 Glad you got an image. What I was going for. Thanks for the comments! |
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11-15-2006, 03:47 PM
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Hey, CT, I really liked this. Especially:
Quote:
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Wild chase, laughing race.
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Packed quite a bit into those four aptly chosen words. |
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11-16-2006, 02:00 AM
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Best Seller
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Haiku in any style is off my beaten path but I quite liked what I read. I always appreciate a little experimentation to mix things up!!!
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12-11-2006, 02:59 PM
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Ink Slinger
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Thanks!
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