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Poetry Poems, Haiku & Tanka etc.

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Old 10-22-2005, 12:25 PM   #1
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ho ho ho I LOVE IT!

Business in America and around the world really is about backstabbing, which is wrong, which is finely expressed here.

My only suggestion is to add some punctuation and dont' capitalize every first letter of every line. It'll add to the poem, I think.
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