jaworski

An art gallery opening
Is not the kind of place
I like to introduce myself at;
Picasso comparisons made
At the very utterance of 'hello'.

A theatric display of wit
Beyond its time, I guess.
The columnist' words
All far ahead of us.

Empty glasses of chardonnay
Trying to chase away the feeling
Of sarcastic humour awaiting
To cut through this installation
Like a digital camera spree,
Portrayed by rather Ok
Private school photography.

It's a click of a button
Like a line from a mouth
That falls absently
Into another's subjectivity.

A collection of
Carefully phrased names
Phased inside
Designer jackets
With none of the tags showing.

This is the opening line
Of tomorrow's critique page;
Designer clothing
That we're all wearing.

Wani

Isn't it strange that there is a right to free speech, but no right to be listened to by an intelligent audience?

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the hoof slide is marked on the course.
Though Allah and Earth pardon sin,
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Harry Haller

I like these lines


Like a line from a mouth
That falls absently
Into another's subjectivity.

I'm not really into the rest of it that much. I think some of it is good imagery. I think I am getting the point of it in the end but I'm not really sure. I don't really like the photograpy images very much. I really don't like "Like a digital camera spree," I also don't like "installation"

I would really like it like this

Draw a line from a mouth
and watch the words
fall absently
into another's subjectivity.

I feel like I could take that and run with it. I'm not sure if we are seeing it the same way but I think it is probably similar.

I just like the artsy images better than the photography ones. Words like brushes, stroke, frayed, They all give me a different feeling than things like digital and installation. I'm not 100% sure what you are going for. I just would like it better in that way. It's all subjective though
Best of Luck,
SKylor

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