shmity72

Do you know what it is to riddle?

Do you know how the tales were toiled?

Do you remember what was said...?

passed the darnels.






excerpt from my book

comments welcome

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mswietek

Shmitty,

It's an awfully small excerpt to make anything out of it. Can you post more, or is that the only bit that's poetry? Perhaps you could post a larger section (including this part) in the Critique forum?

Michael

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shmity72

...for your response michael.

i shall check out that there critique forum. I'm obviously new.

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shmity72

here is a longer one with verbosity to spare...

http://www.writingforums.com/viewtopic.php?t=23353

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mswietek

Smitty,

You can post the linked poem here as well. I had just assumed that since you said book, you meant prose. Sloppy reading on my part.

Michael

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shmity72

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GBS wrote: Slaves 'oft love their masters.

mswietek

I meant, you can post the poem you posted in Critique as a thread in this forum as well.

Michael

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"Don't imagine that the art of poetry is any simpler than the art of music, or that you can please the expert before you have spent at least as much effort on the art of verse as an average piano teacher spends on the art of music." - Ezra Pound