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08-25-2005, 05:58 PM
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Run From the Border
Run From the Border
Sweat covers the furrows
in my brow with a sickly sheen.
fingers dig into the handicap rail
I don’t care if it isn’t clean.
There is a heat growing
inside that needs the open air.
my feet are braced against the door,
someone’s knocking; I don’t care.
Gurgling and bubbling
like a percolator set on high
I have tremors from my feet
clear up past both thighs.
I bear down, bending the rail
an abomination is due soon,
I know it without a doubt,
It’s those damn tacos from noon,
on the express train out.
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08-25-2005, 06:07 PM
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I can only say I am completely grateful that you did not go into to grave detail, lol. Interesting write about an um, what should I call it an interesting subject???
Nae ;0)
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08-25-2005, 06:26 PM
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Nae-
That is so true. I could have greatly expounded on it with some more imagery. If you want I'll rewrite it with more descriptions. LOL Thanks fo stopping by
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08-25-2005, 06:32 PM
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No thank you, I can handle this and will not be eating tacos tonight for sure! There is enough imagery here to satisfy even the most curious! LOL
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08-25-2005, 06:45 PM
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well thats sent me running, thanks.
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08-25-2005, 08:12 PM
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Dannyboy-
Did I make your stomach clench and churn? LOL. Thanks for stopping and comementing.
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08-25-2005, 08:40 PM
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laughing!!!
i'm very glad now that i didn't stop at the taco bell on the way home from gigi's last night.
i did, however, dig into the ice cream in the freezer.
this was a very fun thing to read.
vodka
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08-25-2005, 08:52 PM
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vodka-
yes that is the primary rule when out on a drinking night. Do NOT stop at taco bell. Glad I could make you chuckle a bit with this one. Ice cream after drinking does sound good. I should try that, maybe would sooth my stomach.
Thanks for stopping
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08-25-2005, 08:54 PM
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i have the most tried and true method for avoiding a hangover:
drink a 16oz. glass of water with two tylenol before you go to bed. when you wake up in the middle of the night, drink an 8 oz. glass of orange juice. get sleep. wake up, be hangover free!
uh huh.
vodka
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08-25-2005, 08:58 PM
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vodka-
that is a wive's tale. Who wakes up in the middle of the night to drink orange juice. If I"m that hammered, I'm out til the next afternoon.
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08-25-2005, 10:40 PM
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the best cure is to stay up drinking with the sunrise then hit the pubs and then sometime around 2pm collapse, you'll not move for a day and wake up fine.
Course kids ruined this for me!
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08-25-2005, 11:03 PM
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Dannyboy-
That is good advice too. I used to do that when I was a college student, man were those good times.
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08-25-2005, 11:18 PM
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haha, i actually read this, laughed, and then went and took a crap.
So you really affected me with this one... right down to my bowels! Wow, yo'ure good..
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08-26-2005, 09:37 AM
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Smalls-
It must have inspired something in you. Thanks for stopping and commenting
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08-26-2005, 02:20 PM
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Burnz
well this poem is a toot for sure! Laughing so hard...fun fun fun, in a flatuating kinda way.
Bobbie
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