Euthanasia - Writers Forum

Psycho6058 · 08-25-2005, 10:12 AM

The blue steel wore his fingers like a glove.
The note he left said: “I did this for love.”
An explosion cracked the silence of the farm.
He was thinking of his oath: “First do no harm.”

In his whole life he did nothing but good,
so he knew his note would be understood.
The cancer had eaten her from the inside,
she only weighed sixty pounds when she died.

Science has limits and this was such a case.
She wanted to go with dignity and grace.
He kissed her cheek and once again took aim.
And put the second bullet through his brain.

103_smalls · 08-25-2005, 10:19 AM

You created a very vivid image using not-so-very-many words... by vivid I mean I could see the guy's head explode... see the brains flying everywhere.. it was disgusting, but I enjoyed it! As always, good job Psycho.

journyman161 · 08-25-2005, 11:00 AM

Nice work Wayne. I didn't find it disgusting but rather sad as the implication is he killed himself because of his compassion rather than because he couldn't (or didn't want to) live without her.

One slightly off note for me was that as a doctor, would he use a gun? surely he'd have had far more options for arranging the result in a less destructive way?

If this is from real life, then I understand the choice wasn't yours, but if not, my comment stands.

It's 2AM here, so I'm not going to attempt to critique the work as such; besides, I liked it as is.

mammamaia · 08-25-2005, 12:50 PM

ditto jman's comments and questions...

Psycho6058 · 08-25-2005, 01:26 PM

Thank you smalls, glad you got a good picture.
Mark & Maia (M & M), I feel that since murder/suicide is not the act of a rational person anyway, the means to the end would not be a significant factor. Besides, poison is too boring.

nae411 · 08-25-2005, 02:14 PM

I didn't read this as it being a doctor, but a husband and wife. 1st bullet being for her and second his. Am I wrong?

Very sad, and moving piece.

Nae

Unpretty Girl · 08-25-2005, 02:37 PM

I got the image wery well too. It's a very moving piece psyco, there was a lot of emotion in it, and I can really see someone doing something like that. "I did this for love" that's my favorite line.
~Unpretty

Psycho6058 · 08-25-2005, 03:37 PM

Tink, I was picturing a husband/wife, however I was trying to show the husband as a doctor with the last line of the first verse (the hipocratic oath).
Unpretty, thank you, glad you liked it

mammamaia · 08-26-2005, 09:00 AM

sorry to harp on the doctor thing, but a doctor wouldn't be likely to use poison, either... just an easily-administered OD of morphine or the like...

that said, i agree that a bullet to the brain is more dramatic and not boring.. other than literally, of course!

Psycho6058 · 08-27-2005, 07:29 AM

Thanks Maia, by poison I was thinking of an overdose of some sort, so we're on the same wave length.