The Man in the Uncolored House - Writers Forum

Psycho6058 · 08-19-2005, 11:54 AM

With every word he utters

the dark angels of the underworld
clap their cloven hooves together.

With every thought he has

the denizens of the depths of Hell
nod their approval.

With every action he takes

the belly of the beast
shakes with joy and laughter.

And

We’re too blind to see.

mswietek · 08-19-2005, 09:39 PM

Psycho,

You seem to be on a sonic tear as of late. All of the heavy n's, d's, p's and b's make the lines especially ominous. Of course I won't comment on the politics

.... but the point is well made.

Michael

Psycho6058 · 08-20-2005, 07:23 AM

Thank you Michael, knowing you don't agree but can still appreciate the work makes me all the more appreciative.

journyman161 · 08-20-2005, 07:46 AM

I'm ashamed to admit I got who this was about from the content; the name didn't really ring any bells until I realised who you were talking about.

Is there' any truth to the rumour he wants pennsylvania ave renumbered so he lives at number 666?

Nice work again.

mammamaia · 08-20-2005, 10:51 AM

i, of course, agree with the pov, wayne... but i have to question the inclusion of 'denizens of the deep' in your list of satanic entities... imo, it's doing a great disservice to innocent whales, dolphins, and such, to equate them with beelzebubba and his minions...

[doncha love 'beelzebubba'?... just now came to me... see what an inspiration you are!?]

hugs, me

Psycho6058 · 08-20-2005, 10:59 AM

I'm strictly using Mirriam Webster's definition of denizen:Main Entry: den·i·zen
Pronunciation: 'de-n&-z&n
Function: noun
Etymology: Middle English denizeine, from Anglo-French denzein inhabitant, inner part, inner, from Old French denz within, from Late Latin deintus, from Latin de- + intus within —more at ENT-
Date: 15th century
1 : INHABITANT
and my reference to the deep is referring to underground, not under water. I would never dis a dolphin (not on porpoise, LOL)

mammamaia · 08-20-2005, 11:02 AM

yeah, but the phrase has long been used to refer to the creatures that inhabit the seas, so the reader won't know you're not using it as the common expression, will they?

Psycho6058 · 08-20-2005, 02:50 PM

I think they would when taken in the context of the rest of the poem.

Burnz · 08-20-2005, 09:25 PM

Nicely done psycho. I have heard of morlocks being called denizens before. Of course, it was in a comic book with the X-men but they called them the denizens referring to the underground dwellers. Good write

journyman161 · 08-20-2005, 09:31 PM

Wayne, I also assumed it was the sea you're talking about & had to discount the idea you were talking about cetaceans; I figured their must be a mythology I know bowt of where the evil demons were in the depths of the oceans.

I was going to make a comment about the difficulty in visualising dolphins nodding.

Even reading back over it, I have to try to make it into anything other than the sea.

You're right on the meaning, but I think common useage has 'the deep' referring to oceans.

Psycho6058 · 08-21-2005, 06:57 AM

Maia & Mark, does this edit help get them dolphins out of your head? LOL

Burnz, thanks for the back up, I though I remembered H.G.Wells using that phrase as well in his "Journey to the center of the Earth:"

journyman161 · 08-21-2005, 07:08 AM

Yep, works for me. Mind you it wasn't a biggie for me anyway or I would have mentioned it first up.

Psycho6058 · 08-21-2005, 02:25 PM

That's true, thanks anyway Mark.