October Song

There’s a stillness now, in the air
And the memories drift through
Casting a thousand reflections on the tranquil water,
The way things were, how they could have been,
The way I wanted them to be.
It’s not always the same thing.
And so I sit here by this pool
This night so silent and serene
Watching each memory float by
Before it moves on to the star-strewn sky.

Jehuty

I like this one a lot. I personally love looking at the stars, so it's a bit extra for me...great work.

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Would you take a trip with me, on the back of a star?

Rico

OK i liked the idea behind this poem, I think its a great idea and theme for a poem. You used some great images, as well, and that really added to it. However, the poem's rhythm...well...there isn't any, really. The lines dont flow together very well and read as very choppy. This isn't meant as an insult on the poem, I think with some polishing and editing it could be a great poem. It just leaves a little to be desired, is all. Would love to read an edited version of it, as I really do like your imagery.