bobbiego

What Guilt

Let us feel repentance,
let us grieve,
let the scent of
white plum blossoms
fill our nostrils
one more time.

Let us feel the hard times
and punctuate them with
random sneezes.

Let our selfish cells congregate,
taste the bitter fruit,
and lead us to where
timetwigs can not
ensnarl our wings.

Just do not leave us here
in the luxury of twilight,
we are lovers of simplicity.


Bobbie Kilzer Gogain

Penelope

I almost read earwigs into timetwigs - maybe it was the ensnarl in the next line that took me off base. I cared enough to tell you this too. I loved smelling white plum blossoms with sneezes .. this is just one of those poems where I'm charmed on all levels.

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bobbiego

Thank you so much for you kind comments, coming from a writer such as you it means alot to me.

Bobbie

nae411

I am with Pen on this one. Absolutely charming poem. Look forward to reading more of you.

Nae ;0)

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bobbiego

Renae, thank you very much. I plan on sticking around awhile, this is a great site. I am so glad you two liked my poem.

Bobbie

ms. vodka

unanimous... is that how you spell that??? unanimous...

anyway, you get the point.

i liked this very much... how did i miss it before?

vodka

Psycho6058

deliciously descriptive, I can smell the plum blossoms. Good job.

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bobbiego

Thank you Vodka and Psy....now I am turning cartwheels!

Bobbie

peterpaulino

hi. what's charming in this poem (as pointed out by others too) are the sneezing part, and the somewhat Oriental feel it could leave a reader like me. I also like the smell of plum blossoms, as a child we used to have this soap with that kind of scent. Is this one about feeling both guilt and pleasure at the same time? I love that kind of topic as much as I love anything bittersweet. And hey, isn't sneezing some kind of pleasure too?

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bobbiego

Pete,

Your too kind. Thank you. I love the Oriental feel of poems too, I just can not seem to master them.
I am too dang wordy!

Bobbie

johnjohndoe

dear bobbiego,

"let white plum blossoms
fill our nostrils
one more time."

perhaps having the scent of the plum blossoms filling our nostrils would be a little more comfortable...but, hey, that's just me.

seriously interesting poem.

i look forward to seeing more of your postings.

john. john doe.

bobbiego

I guess I really don't want petals up my nose...
thanks for the "got ya"

Bobbie