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Poetry Poems, Haiku & Tanka etc.

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Old 08-16-2005, 08:33 AM   #1
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A self imposed prison with a jump to death as a release, I think I would try ot find something to open your eyes before the lunge to freedom.

Well written, just worries me some.

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Old 08-16-2005, 08:35 AM   #2
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Re: Cold Feet

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Originally Posted by Dont_Panic
There’s no need of eyes
When you’re looking
For your own door.
I found that part beautiful. Great poem, even though I personally don't like the style of that it is written, but that's just me. Keep up the good work.
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Old 08-16-2005, 09:29 AM   #3
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hummm... this was a piece that had me guessing, i had to read it over a few times, but after i finally got it, i liked it a lot... you had a lot of wonderful images throughout the piece as well... good work.
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