Just something I needed to express. Dunno if its coherent... - Writers Forum

Pardot Kynes · 08-15-2005, 08:45 PM

I tried to make it sound less suicidal...writing is basically all I live for.

Painful evasions, deathly evasions, everything falling apart.
Rythym and rhyme, spent through all time,
Can only serve as walls against good work.
Nothing makes sense, I try to be there, but no one is there for me.
I hate to work, love to write, please dont leave me just out of spite.
No matter what, we will stay together, if only from the words in a letter.
We cannot part, you and I, for if that happened, I would lay down and die.
No matter what, I will come first, but please, my love, dont leave me to die.
With out you, without imagination, I would cease to be, a magnificent creation.

I wrote this after my sis bashed me for finally showing her my stuff. She said I would never be a writer, and couldnt put two words together if they were magnetized. I almost kicked her across the room. I restrained myself. Barely...

103_smalls · 08-15-2005, 09:09 PM

I'm glad to see that in such a tough time you can write a poem that is in fact quite coherent... which is a word I had to look up, by the way!

Don't get discouraged by people who tell you that you can never succeed... they are all ignorant fuckers, and their opinion matters less than dirt, so don't listen to it... use that as fuel to pump your engine, use every discouraging word from an aarogant critic to make you better- don't let those bastards bring you down, becasue, like i said, they DO NOT matter.

Keep it up, keep writing, keep getting better, keep posting, keep getting your stuff looked at, and most of all, keep your chin in the air... i promise you you'll be good if you work at it, that's not something that adults just say to make us feel good- it's real truths, don't forget that.

And if you ever need an encouraging voice, PM me!

Pardot Kynes · 08-15-2005, 09:45 PM

Thanks Smalls.

bobbiego · 08-16-2005, 08:38 AM

"With out you, without imagination, I would cease to be, a magnificent creation. "

This line alone proves you are indeed a writer. To heck with the thoughts of others...if you become only a writer to yourself, which won't happen, you are still a writer.

Bobbie

Jehuty · 08-16-2005, 08:52 AM

Don't let her bash on you. I mean, you shouldn't let it influence you too much. You are a unique writer, as is everyone on here. Be proud of what you are and do. Don't let your sister decide your future. Everyone has the power to make or break their own. And I'm sure you'll make it.

Sparx · 08-16-2005, 09:16 AM

Your sister must open her eyes wider because your a brilliant writer and this poem shows that. You have absolutely great lines within this poem. I to really enjoyed this line: "With out you, without imagination, I would cease to be, a magnificent creation." Fantasic.

I know you have probably heard this millions of times but don't let people put you down. Its like Erza Pound once said: "Pay no attention to the criticism of men who have never themselves written a noteable work". In your case, sister

Anyway, nice poem and keep writing.

Pardot Kynes · 08-17-2005, 07:16 PM

Thanks all. I kinda needed the encouragement. But it made my day today when a really hot chick asked me to write a poem about her after a poetry assignment in English class...I have a date!...well, sorta. More like study group..anyway..