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| Poetry Poems, Haiku & Tanka etc. |
08-13-2005, 10:19 AM
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I wrote someone a poem.
I wrote someone a poem
a really lousy poem
And I asked her if she liked it
and she told me that she did
So I asked her if she'd ever inspired
a man to write a poem before
"Well, yeah," she replied with a smile.
"That's what happens when you date musicians."
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08-13-2005, 07:20 PM
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another look into the mind of johnjohndoe.. which i think must not be such a bad place to be...
vodka
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08-14-2005, 10:52 PM
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dear v & g,
thanks for the positive-coms.
u 2 r way 2 nice...
john.
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08-15-2005, 12:11 PM
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good poem
hmm...perhaps why i don't date poets/musicians.
I, too, like the rhythm of the piece, flows right off the tongue
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08-15-2005, 01:49 PM
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Yeah, this is a very nice, little poem. Made me smile at the end. Nice work on this piece.
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"KNIVES AND RHYMES"
"poetry or the streets."
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08-15-2005, 03:21 PM
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Hey jjd,
What can I say, I like this alot. I love the simplicty and the everydayness of your poems. It made me smile too.
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08-15-2005, 04:29 PM
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I enjoyed this a great deal. For whatever reason, it had a decidedly 60's flavor to me.
Oh, by the way... am I trippin', or should there be a 'd' on 'like' in the third line?
Excellent work, john. Thanks for sharing.
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08-15-2005, 05:23 PM
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dear nola,
no, you weren't trippin'...i fixed that mistake, thanks to you.
also, thanks to everyone that took the time to comment on this poem!!
sincerely,
john. john doe.
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