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Honestly, I didn't really like it. The whole thing seemed to read like a list rather than a poem, and it lacked the imagery and careful word choice that I would have liked to hear. The message was nice though, and you got it across clearly. Work on imagery and punctuation/typos and you might have something here.
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The Palace Flophouse
When Newton closed his eyes beneath a tree
and took the apple from the serpent, he
conceived the urge of humanity, plea, plea,
procreant desire and tendency.
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