ittybitty_13_2000

this needs some work, but it just came to me so i hurried up and trhew some stuff down.. any suggestions would be greatly appreciated... thanx

All the things you said
Are running through my head
And I am trying to make sense of them
But I can’t figure it out alone

I need you to help me
Help me to understand
why you did what you did
Explain to me why you chose her

All the things you said
I cant get out of my mind
And when I am with you
I cant stop thinking I’m crossing the line

Being friends with you
Is just not enough
Baby just tell me what you see
When you are looking at me

I know it might be wrong
But I want to fly away
To a place where it’s just you and me
So we can finally be together

I know my feelings aren’t allowed
But I cant stop how I feel
I try to move on but then I see you
And I want to be in your arms

I know you are with her
But I can tell you still love me
You know we belong together
That is why we can’t let go

This is not enough
The so called friendship we share
When we look at each other
Our feelings go down deep

I start to wonder if I will ever be free
From all the things you’ve said
They keep running through my head

__________________
the most beautiful things in the world cannot be seen or even touched. they must be felt with the heart.
-helen keller-

ittybitty_13_2000

sorry bout that guys.. that last satnza should read:

I start to wonder if I will ever be free
From all the things you’ve said
They keep running through my head
Even though I know this is not allowed

__________________
the most beautiful things in the world cannot be seen or even touched. they must be felt with the heart.
-helen keller-

ms. vodka

i wonder what this would be like if you re-wrote it without rhyme?

just wondering...

vodka

ittybitty_13_2000

yes i agree.. i am going to try and rewrite this without rhyme. does anyone feel this poem is too long though? should i maybe shorten it a bit? thanx yall

__________________
the most beautiful things in the world cannot be seen or even touched. they must be felt with the heart.
-helen keller-

Shy_Love

it reminds me of a song...my TATO ...maybe that's not their name...but they have a song called all the things you said...and your first two lines match it perfectly...weird how that happens sometimes.

ittybitty_13_2000

you know i didnt even realise that until u pointed it out... and the band is call TaTu... and i listend to their song and your right the first two lines are the same.. definately weird

__________________
the most beautiful things in the world cannot be seen or even touched. they must be felt with the heart.
-helen keller-