RedStone

"One of my old poems, might not be in any kind of common order but it was wrote with meaning."




Met within a world touch could never reach
Passed emotions through words typed out
Spoken words couldn’t tempt us this time
You typed “I love you”
Didn’t I type “I love you too”?
Felt something stir along my streams of feelings
Butterflies escaped their hidden cages
We were in a world of love no-one knew of
But in the end it shattered before us
If it had been another place
Our love would still be going strong
And memories wouldn’t haunt us…

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A rock in the jar of many others, going unnoticed.

Penelope

As a reader, I'd like to let you know that it's of no consequence when you wrote this poem. It's new to me.

That being said (with good intent) I rarely read a poem with 'butterflies' in it that isn't clichéd. You managed to pull it off and therefore .. kudos to you.

I would have liked to see 'time' added to this line.

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"Trees cause more pollution than automobiles do." Ronald Reagan ~ 1981

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