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Old 08-05-2005, 01:16 PM   #1
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Drowning
Your words hold
no more authenticity
than those of my own
We bathe together, clothed
in this raging river of lies
and in that river
We both know
that the violent waters
of deciet do flow
And it is in these waters
that we will die today
Drowning in our own words;
Drowning now, this day
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Old 08-05-2005, 04:19 PM   #2
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"The truth will set you free" nice piece, smalls.
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Old 08-05-2005, 04:46 PM   #3
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Nice poem . Short but so powerful and truthful. Great imagery throughout this peice. Well done.
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Old 08-05-2005, 05:51 PM   #4
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Thanks guys. I was pretty skeptical about this one, so I'm glad to hear that you both liked it
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Old 08-05-2005, 07:03 PM   #5
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This is very good I like how you use your choice of words in how the poem flows perfectly. I agree this is a great poem to read.
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Old 08-05-2005, 08:12 PM   #6
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Thanks somethingsimple! I'm looking forward to reading some of your stuff too!
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